Subject: Re: The fields were covered in snow
From: Cecilia Baader (ceciliaann@hotmail.com)
Date: Fri Jan 05 2001 - 11:33:05 GMT
Scottie B. wrote:
> But, dahling. I thought that WAS the active voice.
Ah, then I have a looser definition than you, dahlink. For the passage that
I quoted would be hammered for using the passive voice, as it uses some form
of the verb "to be" in nearly every sentence. An active voice would be more
like:
"He thought about his past, when he fought, sang, and raced
horses, and knew the uplift of the great dances; he contrasted
this feasting and comfort with his old friends hunger, cold,
and fatigue; his old life, when he lived out to the tops of
his fingers, turned thin and shadowy. Her wonderful magic
altered life . . ."
It's much more active, though the words have changed very little. You can
feel him thinking about it right now, actively. But it ruins the whole
thing, loses the wondering feeling.
That's my definition, anyway.
Regards,
Cecilia.
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