Re: One of Seymour's poems...

still doesn't warm me up. but oh well.

young widower sits - 5
upon his surburban lawn - 7
spying the full moon - 5
miss white kitty comes - 5
rolls over and with blessing - 7
bites on his left hand - 5

>>> haikux2@yahoo.com 06/20/03 11:11AM >>>

i'm very impressed with the bananafish offerings re
the seymour poem.

not to be a humbug, but:

a double-haiku should have the following syllables per
line:

575 575

(it's easier to criticize than create.)

i'm still fussing with/polishing mine.

kim

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Received on Fri Jun 20 14:54:26 2003