RE: One of Seymour's poems...

Offered palm? Buddha? I was picturing vegetation.
Daniel

melanie, don't give up now.

problems: 2nd line should read widower and hence 8
syllables.

why 'mistress'? cat is clearly a member of his
household, ie his cat? of course buddy wants us to
think of muriel. but not a mistress.

i love your use of palm instead of hand. the tender,
vulnerable part. and there's a buddha suggestion
here. the last line is excellent.

kim

--- ErsatzAzalea@aol.com wrote:
> last attempt
>
>
>
> > only his nightclothes 5
> > >and full moon for a widow 7
> > >on his dew-soaked lawn. 5
> white cat, bored mistress 5
> > slow approaches, rolls over, 7
> > >bites an offered palm. 5
> > >
> >
>
>
> ~melanie
>

__________________________________
Do you Yahoo!?
SBC Yahoo! DSL - Now only $29.95 per month!
http://sbc.yahoo.com
-
* Unsubscribing? Mail majordomo@roughdraft.org with the message
* UNSUBSCRIBE BANANAFISH
-
* Unsubscribing? Mail majordomo@roughdraft.org with the message
* UNSUBSCRIBE BANANAFISH
Received on Fri Jun 20 17:13:53 2003