Subject: Re: The White Shoe Irregular
From: Will Hochman (Hochman@scsu.ctstateu.edu)
Date: Sat Aug 12 2000 - 16:07:07 GMT
Josh, I enjoyed your ability with dialog and liked the story but was
disappointed at the end--I'd suggest using more plot twisting based
on the story of how the wife likes the author's stories but doesn't
see the "art" to the husband's stories. (an opportunity to tell some
interesting side stories...)
Your fine craft with fiction makes me confident I can offer this
feedback but if I've taken too much liberty, I apologize and simply
thank you for a pleasant set of screens, will
-- Will Hochman Assistant Professor of English Southern Connecticut State University 501 Crescent St, New Haven, CT 06515 - * Unsubscribing? Mail majordomo@roughdraft.org with the message * UNSUBSCRIBE BANANAFISH
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