Re: One of Seymour's poems...

Responses below --

Michael J ANELLO wrote:
> suburban?

"winding labyrinth of homes" in the title :). I cheated.

>where is he a widower. "Bereaved" in line 2

>is that cat bored or psychotic?

The word "lolls" implies boredom, to me, with maybe a hint of
winsomeness. I didn't attempt to convey any psychosis at all, but
technically being "under the moon" casts this mood upon the whole scene.

> he l e t s her bite his hand.

I think this is implied by the overall image -- the guy is gazing at the
moon while the cat bites his hand.

> widower is sitting.

You're right, this wasn't spelled out or implied anywhere. I'd let the
reader figure that one out. I think the mere mechanics of a cat biting
someone's hand, and the stillness implied in the gaze, almost requires
that the guy be sitting.

I actually pictured him sitting, knees pulled up almost to his chin, his
arms wrapped around his legs and the cat/kitten lolling around in the
grass in front of him biting his hand. But I couldn't fit all that into
the line constraints :).

>
> other than that, it's a poem that feels warm to me. nice job.
>

Thanks much, high praise :) Perhaps only a medium hand slap?

Jim

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Received on Thu Jul 3 14:47:08 2003