Re: One of Seymour's poems...

melanie,

i think if you can incorporate michael's observations
below into your lovely effort, you will have written
seymour's poem.

(the 'who' is weak and could go for another
descriptive word.)

wait: doesn't seymour specifically say it's the
'left' hand?

kim

--- Michael J ANELLO <Michael.J.Anello@state.or.us>
wrote:
> very pretty! praise? way more warming than mine.
>
> criticisms? buddy says the cat's a "she." the moon
> is "full." dammit, i forgot that cat was "bored."
> back to the drawing board...
> cat was kingpin before wife. hm...
>
>
> >>> ErsatzAzalea@aol.com 06/20/03 12:04PM >>>
>
> refurbished.
>
> only his nightclothes 5
> and moon for a widower 7
> on his dew-soaked lawn. 5
> abandoned white cat 5
> who approaches, rolls over, 7
> bites an offered palm. 5
>
>
> ~melanie
>
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Received on Fri Jun 20 15:16:14 2003