RE: One of Seymour's poems...

no other try has contained all buddy's descriptions below, has it? i'd like to think there's a prettier way of conveying the following...

young, widower, sitting on his grass, suburban, looking at the full moon, bored white female cat approaches, rolls over, he lets her bite his left hand

than...

young widower sits
upon his suburban lawn
spying the full moon
bored miss white cat comes
rolls over and with blessing
bites on his left hand

(duffman! oh yeah!)
>>> daniel.yocum@Peterson.af.mil 06/26/03 02:19PM >>>
OK Kim, drop the polish rag, let's see it.
Daniel

i'm very impressed with the bananafish offerings re
the seymour poem.

not to be a humbug, but:

a double-haiku should have the following syllables per
line:

575 575

(it's easier to criticize than create.)

i'm still fussing with/polishing mine.

kim
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Received on Thu Jun 26 17:28:38 2003